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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. QGbx
The line graph describes the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universites over a ten year period. During certain period, the eagerness for studying in Australia has increased due to extremely superb universities and attractive places. The graphical reprenstation shows a sustainable rise in both overseas and local students however overseas students graph gives a gradual rise from 20000 to 80000 over a ten year period. Yet, local students population has an enormous difference from 2001 but from 2001 to 2010 the population of students has tend to pull-off a sustainable number of students. While in local students, there was a fluccuation over ten year period. At the begining, the applications were not rapid enough although it increased in total. In general, there isn't a drastic fall in enrolments of students from aboard and locally. Overall, the enrolments were undoubtedly higher and showed a dramatic admiration for Australian universities.
The line graph
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describes
the
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enrolments
of overseas
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students
and
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local
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students
in Australian
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universites
over a
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ten year
period.

During certain period, the eagerness for studying in Australia has increased due to
extremely
superb universities and attractive places.

The graphical
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reprenstation
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shows
a sustainable rise in both overseas and
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local
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students
however
overseas
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students
graph gives a gradual rise from 20000 to 80000 over a
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ten year
period.
Yet
,
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local
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students
population has an enormous difference from 2001
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but
from 2001 to 2010 the population of
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students
has
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tend
to pull-off a sustainable number of
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students
. While in
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local
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students
, there was a
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fluccuation
over
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ten year
period. At the
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begining
, the applications were not rapid
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enough
although it increased in total.
In general
, there isn't a drastic fall in
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enrolments
of
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students
from aboard and
locally
.

Overall
, the
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enrolments
were
undoubtedly
higher and
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showed
a dramatic admiration for Australian universities.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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5.5
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