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The table below shows how young people in Tokyo, Japan, listened to music over the previous month. The pie chart shows a record company’s international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music.

The table below shows how young people in Tokyo, Japan, listened to music over the previous month. The pie chart shows a record company’s international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music. poV3
The table describes what is the best medium to listening music Preferred for japanese Young generation in Tokyo, over the previous month and pie chart illustrate percentages of the people who loves to listen or recorded music. Overall, It can be said that, male are interested to listening music( percentages wise) than Female and From the pie charts people are more interested to live music than recorded music. First and foremost is that live music contains highest percentages (76%) in the company international than Tokyo, japan(60% for male and 44% for female). Almost 4 times higher the younger People (male) in Tokyo, Japan listening music Through mp3 players than. Company’s international (20%), but its double if compare the Female (40%). Only 55%, 19% male eager to hearing music through internet and CDS AND famale are 42% and 22% respectively. 4% people of company international Doesn't like to music.
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people
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music
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(
percentages wise) than Female and From the pie charts
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people
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live
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music
than recorded
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music
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live
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music
contains
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company
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international
than Tokyo, japan(60% for male and 44% for female). Almost 4 times higher the younger
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People
(male) in Tokyo, Japan listening
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music
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Company
’s international (20%),
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Only
55%, 19% male eager to
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hearing
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music
through internet and CDS AND
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famale
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music
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IELTS academic The table below shows how young people in Tokyo, Japan, listened to music over the previous month. The pie chart shows a record company’s international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music.

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148 words
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