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Rate of British Immigration

Rate of British Immigration 9RAr
In 2004, Australia was the first to receive British immigrants, as it received more than 40, 000 immigrants, followed by Spain with approximately 35, 000 immigrants. While the United States of America, France and New Zealand received close numbers of immigrants, estimated at approximately 25 thousand immigrants. Also according to the chart in the following period in 2005, the number of immigrants decreased in all countries compared to the first period, with the exception of France. The number of immigrants to it increased until it almost doubled.
In 2004, Australia was the
first
to receive British
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immigrants
, as it received more than 40, 000
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immigrants
, followed by Spain with approximately 35, 000
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immigrants
. While the United States of America, France and New Zealand received close numbers of
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immigrants
, estimated at approximately 25 thousand
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immigrants
.
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Also
according to the chart in the following period in 2005, the number of
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immigrants
decreased in all countries compared to the
first
period,
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with the exception of
France. The number of
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immigrants
to it increased until it almost doubled.
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IELTS academic Rate of British Immigration

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1 paragraphs
87 words
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