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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. RQxp
The given diagrams illustrate the area of West Park Secondary School which had been reconstructed since 1950 to 2010. Overall, it can be seen that many facilities had been reduced while there were several new area had been replaced. Meanwhile, some sections of the school had remained in their initial place. In 1950, there were a school building and a large playground in the right side, whereas many accomodations and a green areas take a half left section. Moving in 1980, it can be noticeable that main building and school playground hadn’t been changed while field was the new facilities which school has spent one forth of its area to build. Moreover, there were car park and science block on the upper left corner which take approximately one eight of the total area each. In the following 30 years, the playground and a school yard area had been lessen. However, car park had been extended to around three eight of overall space. In the meantime, science block and the main building had no change.
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diagrams illustrate the
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area
of West Park Secondary
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School
which had
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since 1950 to 2010.
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, it can be
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seen
that
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many
facilities had been
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reduced
while there were several new
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area
had
been replaced
. Meanwhile,
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some
sections of the
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school
had remained in their initial place.

In 1950, there were a
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school
building and a large playground
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in the right side
, whereas
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many
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accomodations
and a green
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areas
take a half
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left
section.

Moving in 1980, it can be noticeable that main building and
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school
playground hadn’t been
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changed
while field was the new facilities which
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school
has spent one forth of its
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area
to build.
Moreover
, there were car park and science block on the upper
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left
corner which take approximately one eight of the total
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area
each.

In the following 30 years, the playground and a
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school
yard
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area
had been
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lessen
.
However
, car park had
been extended
to around three eight of
overall
space. In the meantime, science block and the main building had no
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change
.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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