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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. 0Q53
A glance that the pie charts provided reveals the percentage of sodium, saturated fat and the sugar consumed on foods in daily basis in USA where they are unhealthy when eaten more. Overall, it is clear that most of the sodium and saturated fat is consumed at dinner while snacks contains a huge amount of added sugar in it. Whereas, in breakfast consumption of saturated fat and added sugar is same. The percentage of sodium in breakfast is low (16%) when compared to other two nutrients (16%). In contrast to this, sodium holds the highest percentage of 43% at dinner in which the saturated fat is 37% and added sugar is 23%. In lunch time, the percentage of added sugar is low (19%), the other two nutrients are above 25% (to be precise saturated fat-26% and sodium-29%). But in snacks, added sugar has 42% highest in three where the saturated fat is 21% and sodium is 14%.
A glance that the pie charts provided reveals the
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and the
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consumed on foods in daily basis
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where they are unhealthy when eaten more.

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added
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in it. Whereas, in breakfast consumption of
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saturated
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and
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is same.

The
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of sodium in breakfast is low (16%) when compared to other two nutrients (16%).
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of 43% at dinner in which the
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saturated
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is 37% and
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is 23%.

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lunch time
, the
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of
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is low (19%), the other two nutrients are above 25% (to be precise
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fat-26%
and sodium-29%).
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in snacks,
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has 42% highest in three where the
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is 21% and sodium is 14%.
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IELTS academic The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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