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The table below gives information about the rail transport in five countries in 2015. v.2

The table below gives information about the rail transport in five countries in 2015. v. 2
The table data provides statistics on rail transports in five countries including the number of railway passengers, average distance they crossed and cargo carried on railways in 2015. Overall, China and India had the largest number of railway passengers while Canadian railway carried the maximum amount of goods in the year 2015. Getting back to details, China had the largest railway passengers which accounted for 34 million while Indian railway passengers comprised 21 million. Malaysia had roughly 9 million passengers while Canada and the UAE had about 1 and 7. 5 million rail commuters respectively in 2015. Despite having the least number of railway passengers, Canadian rail authority carried the highest goods. They carried over 34 billion tons of goods which were higher than the cargos carried by China rail authority (about 28 billion tons). Malaysian, Indian and UAE rail transported approximately 29, 21 and 24 billion cargos in 2015 respectively. China rail passengers crossed the highest distance on an average which was around 22 hundred kilometers and that was approximately 600 km higher than that of average distance travelled by an Indian rail passenger. Canadian passengers travelled the least, less than 100 km per head of its population while Malaysian and UAE citizens travelled a similar distance on the train.
The table data provides statistics on
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transports in five countries including the number of
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railway
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passengers
, average
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distance
they crossed and cargo carried on
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railways
in 2015.
Overall
, China and India had the largest number of
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passengers
while Canadian
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carried the maximum amount of
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goods
in the year 2015.

Getting back to
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details
, China had the largest
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railway
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passengers
which accounted for 34
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million
while Indian
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passengers
comprised 21
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million
. Malaysia had roughly 9
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passengers
while Canada and the UAE had about 1 and 7. 5
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million
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rail
commuters
respectively
in 2015. Despite having the least number of
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railway
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passengers
, Canadian
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authority carried the highest
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goods
. They carried over 34 billion tons of
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goods
which were higher than the cargos carried by China
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authority (about 28 billion tons). Malaysian, Indian and UAE
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transported approximately 29, 21 and 24 billion cargos in 2015
respectively
. China
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passengers
crossed the highest
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distance
on an average which was around 22 hundred kilometers and that was approximately 600 km higher than that of average
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distance
travelled by an Indian
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rail
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. Canadian
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travelled the least, less than 100 km per head of its population while Malaysian and UAE citizens travelled a similar
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distance
on the train.
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about the rail transport in five countries in 2015. v. 2

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