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The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. v.1

The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. v. 1
The given table data shows the railway route, passenger number and cargo goods carried in Malaysia, Canada, China and UAE in the year 2007. As is observed from the data, Chinese people used the railway system more than the people of other countries but the cargoes carried more goods in Canada among the given countries. According to the data, 27 million people used rail transports (excluding metro) in China compared to the just 5-6 million railway users in UAE and Malaysia. Only 0. 3 million Canadian people used railway transportations in 2007, which was least among the given four countries. The distance passed by passengers who used railway in these four countries was similar to the data provided for the railway passengers in these four countries for the year 2007. Around two thousand km were passed by Chinese people compared to the less than eight hundred km in UAE and Malaysia. As only 0. 3 million Canadian people used railway in 2007, the distance passed by each passenger was only 80 km which was the least among the figure given for four countries. Interestingly, the cargos that transported goods carried the highest amount in Canada (over 28 tonnes) though the passengers used railway system lesser than other countries. On an average, all of the given four countries had an average of 21- 28 billion tonnes goods carried through the railway system. In summary, Chinese people used the railway more than the people of other country and cargo carried more goods in Canada among the given countries.
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cargo
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goods
carried in Malaysia, Canada, China and UAE in the year 2007. As
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, Chinese
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people
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system more than the
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people
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countries
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cargoes
carried more
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goods
in Canada among the
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countries.

According to the
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, 27
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million
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rail transports (excluding metro) in China compared to the
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5-6
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million
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railway
users
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in UAE
and Malaysia.
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0. 3
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million
Canadian
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transportations in 2007, which was least among the
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four
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. The distance passed by
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who
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railway
in these four
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was similar to the
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provided for the
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railway
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in these four
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for the year 2007. Around two thousand km
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by Chinese
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compared to the less than eight hundred km
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in UAE
and Malaysia. As
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Canadian
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railway
in 2007, the distance passed by each
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was
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80 km which was the least among the figure
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for four
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.
Interestingly
, the
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that transported
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carried the highest amount in Canada (over 28 tonnes) though the
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passengers
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system lesser than other
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. On an average,
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all of the
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21- 28
billion tonnes
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goods
carried through the
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In summary, Chinese
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and
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carried more
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goods
in Canada among the
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0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. v. 1

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