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The table below gives information about the percentage of the internet users according to age in 1998, 1999 and 2000

The table below gives information about the percentage of the internet users according to age in 1998, 1999 and 2000 d92Qd
A glance at the bar chart depicts the shares of the Internet users categorised to age groups between 1998 and 2000. Overall, it is evident that the highest proportion of the internet followers are allocated to aged 16-30 and 31to 50 is also larger percentage compared to less than 15 and 50 or more which had the lowest figures. Initially, as for 16-30 years spent the largest share in four categorised age groups by standing at just over 50% before showing 8% less after a year. Furthermore, it stood at that 45 % which was revealed one year ago. The figure for 31 to 50 having similar spending amounts on all three years, compared in the chart. On the other hand, the remaining two of expenditure one of those less than 15 is just over zero simultaneously, the figure for 50 or more couple times higher in 1998. However, when it comes to 1999, both figures have had almost the same shares of internet users. After twelve months the following diagrams saw a bit bigger proportion than in 1998. (174words)
A glance at the bar chart depicts the shares of the Internet users
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categorised
to age groups between 1998 and 2000.
Overall
, it is evident that the highest proportion of the internet followers
are allocated
to aged 16-30 and 31to 50 is
also
larger percentage compared to less than 15 and 50 or more which had the lowest
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figures
.
Initially
, as for 16-30 years spent the largest share in four
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categorised
age groups by standing at
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just
over 50%
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before
showing 8% less after a
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year
.
Furthermore
, it stood at that 45 % which
was revealed
one
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year
ago. The
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figure
for 31 to 50 having similar spending amounts on all three years, compared in the chart.
On the other hand
, the remaining two of expenditure one of those less than 15 is
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just
over zero
simultaneously
, the
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figure
for 50 or more couple times higher in 1998.
However
, when it
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comes
to 1999, both
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figures
have had almost the same shares of internet users.
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After
twelve months the following diagrams
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a bit bigger proportion than in 1998. (174words)
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