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The table below gives information about the employment sectors in which people from 3 age groups worked.

The table below gives information about the employment sectors in which people from 3 age groups worked. dde6
The table compares the occupations in which three age groups of people are involved namely 18 to 25, 25 to 40, and 40 to 65. Overall, it is clear that the vast majority of people of 18 to 25 are in the retail sector while 25 to 40 hast the highest people in the health sector, and above 60 most of the people are witnessed in manufacturing. In addition, the same amount of people is in law from all age groups. In terms of manufacturing, health, and retail, the most people who belong to less than 25 age are working in the retail sector, and the equal number of people are working in manufacturing from above 40 age while between 25 and 40 age group the greatest number of people are working in the health sector. Regarding agriculture, catering, law, and accountancy, less than 10 people are working from all three age groups. With regards to local government, the most fraction is from above 40 ages whilst the least are from less than 18 age. Moreover, in education, above 25 and above 40 are showing an equal amount of people which is 12. However, others occupation has the highest majority of less than 25 age, compared to 18 people from 25 to 40 ages and just 9 people from above 40 age.
The table compares the occupations in which three
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age
groups of
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are involved
namely
18 to 25, 25 to 40, and 40 to 65.

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, it is
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clear
that the vast majority of
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of 18 to 25 are in the retail
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sector
while 25 to 40 hast the highest
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people
in the health
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, and
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above
60 most of the
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people
are witnessed
in manufacturing.
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, the same amount of
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people
is in law from all
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groups.

In terms of manufacturing, health, and retail, the most
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people
who belong to
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less
than 25
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are
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working
in the retail
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sector
, and the equal number of
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are
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working
in manufacturing from
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40
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age
while between 25 and 40
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group the greatest number of
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people
are
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working
in the health
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sector
. Regarding agriculture, catering, law, and accountancy,
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local
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, the most fraction is from
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40
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ages
whilst the least are from
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less
than 18
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age
.
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, in education,
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25 and
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40 are showing an equal amount of
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people
which is 12.
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, compared to 18
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people
from 25 to 40
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about the employment sectors in which people from 3 age groups worked.

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4 paragraphs
222 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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