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The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and after it was refurbished . The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. During the year of refurbishment-74,000 people, during the year after refurbishment-92,000.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. During the year of refurbishment-74, 000 people, during the year after refurbishment-92, 000. KPoR
The table shows results of surveys regarding visitor satisfaction before and after refurbishment. A total of 74, 000 visitors came to the Ashdown museum befor refurbishment. Out of the the 74, 000 visitors there were a lot of dissatisfied visitors(40%) of them. Very few visitors were satisfied by the infrastructure and the presence of the museum (10%). 30% of them were satisfied and 15% of them were very much satisfied about the museum. Not everyone gives a feedback, there was no response from 5% of them. After Refurbishment - The year after refurbishing the museum, there was a marginal change in the number of visitors and also the positive feedback. After refurbishing, the museum was visited by 92, 000 people which was 18, 000 more after refurbishing. 75% of the visitors were satisfied in which, 35% were very much satisfied and 40% gave a satisfied feedback. There was a drastic fall in the percentage rate of dissatisfied visitors, it went down from 40% to 15% after refurbishing. 5% were very disasitisfied and there was no response from 5% of them. So, the information from the charts clearly show us the increase in number of visitors and a positive increase rate of visitors satisfaction after the museum was refurbished.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. During the year of refurbishment-74, 000 people, during the year after refurbishment-92, 000.

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