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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. 6Mxx
The first pie chart illustrates the energy use in Australian household. While, second pie chart reveals the information of adverse impact made by the greenhouse gas in Australian household. Different categorization of the household energy use have been made in Australia. They are heating, water heating, cooling, lighting, refrigeration and other appliances. Where water heating and other appliances have released most of the Greenhouse gas emissions. Water heating contributed for Greenhouse gas emission in the large amount. Where water heating is impacting at the rate of 32%. While heating are also used at a bigger rate that is 42%.
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, second pie chart reveals the information of adverse impact made by the greenhouse gas in Australian household.
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, water
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, cooling, lighting, refrigeration and other appliances. Where water
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heating
and other appliances have released most of the Greenhouse gas emissions.

Water
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heating
contributed for Greenhouse gas emission in the large amount.
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Where
water
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heating
is impacting at the rate of 32%.
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heating
are
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used
at a bigger rate
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42%.
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IELTS academic The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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  American English
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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