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The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014

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The line graph illustrates the five different flavour of jam(Strawberry, Raspberry, Grape, Cherry, Plum) sold from 2009 to 2014. Overall, it was found that strawberry, raspberry and cherry flavour of jam had a upward movement in sales. Whereas, the plum flavour had a downfall in the sales. In the year 2009, more than 3 million units of strawberry flavour was sold and it reached 7 million in the year 2014. Along with this raspberry and cherry had an ascending sale during the year. Whereas, the grape flavour had a constant rise in the sales from 2009 to 2014. By contrast, the plum flavour had a downfall from 2009 to 2014. In the year 2009, more than 2 million units of jam sold but in the next five years it has been decreased.
The line graph illustrates the five
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of jam(Strawberry, Raspberry, Grape, Cherry, Plum) sold from 2009 to 2014.

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was found
that strawberry, raspberry and cherry
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flavour
of jam had
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upward movement in sales.
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Whereas
, the plum
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flavour
had a downfall in the sales.

In the
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year
2009, more than 3 million units of strawberry
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flavour
was sold
and it reached 7 million in the
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year
2014. Along with this raspberry and cherry had an ascending sale during the
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year
.
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Whereas
, the grape
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flavour
had a constant rise in the sales from 2009 to 2014.

By contrast, the plum
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flavour
had a downfall from 2009 to 2014. In the
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year
2009, more than 2 million units of jam sold
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but
in the
next
five years it has
been decreased
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IELTS academic The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014

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