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The provided maps illustrate how a health centre has developed from 2005 to the present day.

The provided maps illustrate how a health centre has developed from 2005 to the present day. p1O23
The provided maps illustrate how a health centre has developed from 2005 to the present day. Overall, it is clear that the health center saw some noticeable changes. The most outstanding changes is the layout of the center. The first change is that a minor operations room was established behind the office. Moreover, a fourth consulting room has been constructed in the west of the health center. Meanwhile, the main entrance is relocated in the left corner of the map with a reception desk and an area for children to play. On the other hand, three indoor consulting rooms at the complex was decrease in size because of the new consulting room. Beside that, the office, in the left side of the complex, was shrink. On the south side of the center, the car parking was expaned twice with 30 spaces and made a decline in the garden's size.
The provided maps illustrate how a health
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centre
has developed from 2005 to the present day.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the health center
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saw
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some
noticeable
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changes
. The most outstanding
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changes
is the layout of the center.

The
first
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change
is that a minor
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operations
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room
was established
behind the office.
Moreover
, a fourth consulting
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room
has
been constructed
in the west of the health center. Meanwhile, the main entrance
is relocated
in the
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left
corner of the map with a reception desk and an area for children to play.

On the other hand
, three indoor consulting
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rooms
at the complex was decrease in size
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because
of the new consulting
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room
. Beside that, the office, in the
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left
side of the complex, was shrink. On the south side of the center, the car parking was
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expaned
twice with 30 spaces and made a decline in the garden's size.
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IELTS academic The provided maps illustrate how a health centre has developed from 2005 to the present day.

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