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The bar chard provides information about amount of hospital beds available for thousand of people in different countries while the table illustrates data about how some countries care about their people's healthy by

The bar chard provides information about amount of hospital beds available for thousand of people in different countries while the table illustrates data about how some countries care about their people's healthy by qRm6X
The bar chard provides information about amount of hospital beds available for thousand of people in different countries while the table illustrates data about how some countries care about their people's healthy by calculating amount of money spent and also showed the average life estimated. Overall, japan has the highest amount of beds per thousand of the population while it spends lower price on health aspect on the contrary in the united states there are the least beds although it spend more money on health. With detailing look at the bar chart it evident, quantity of hospital beds stand at just 4 per thousand in Australia that was a bit more than Canada and spain, as well as the united kingdom. Germany has the average amount of beds that exist in japan ang the united states in spit of japan has the most number of beds at 14 per thousand people. According to the table it is obvious that the united stated's expenditure on health is twice time more than japan whereas Netherlands spend more monery than japan and less amount than the united states. the average life estimated in Netherlands is in the middle of two other countries as same as health expenditures.
The bar chard provides information about
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beds
available for
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thousand
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different
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countries care about their
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people
's healthy by calculating
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amount
of money spent and
also
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showed
the average life estimated.

Overall
,
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japan
has the highest
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amount
of
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beds
per thousand of the population while it spends lower price on health aspect
on the contrary
in the
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united states
there are the least
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beds
although it
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spend
more money on health.

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evident, quantity of hospital
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beds
stand at
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4 per thousand in Australia that was a bit more than Canada and
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spain
,
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united kingdom
.

Germany has the average
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beds
that exist in
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japan
ang the
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united states
in spit of
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japan
has the most number of
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beds
at 14 per thousand
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people
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stated's expenditure on health is twice time more than
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japan
whereas Netherlands spend more
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monery
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japan
and less
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united states
.
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the
average life estimated
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IELTS academic The bar chard provides information about amount of hospital beds available for thousand of people in different countries while the table illustrates data about how some countries care about their people's healthy by

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