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the provided illustration shows the role of male and female in six different counties between 2012-2017.

the provided illustration shows the role of male and female in six different counties between 2012-2017. A3Vnw

The given diagram shows the enrollment of male and female by gender across six different kinds of occupation in the UK in 2007. overall, by the demonstrated ratios we can figure out sometimes women were more active than men on the other hand there are some categories that provides information about higher activity for men. In general, in spite of women outnumber men in three classifications, there are some conspicuous gender gap in two groups such as, teaching and construction, which we can observe female are more professional in teaching in contrast male’s interests in construction are more than women. As is presented the ratio of other groups are not salient as much as these groups but the table data clearly shows that gender was not important in journals and we had equivalent situation in being journalism. Regarding male, it is clear, they were keen on acting in construction and their second choose was science by 60%. There aren’t any significant differences in percent of the other groups and their ratios are almost the same. Getting back to the details, female after teaching preferred to take part in therapy by 81 %. According to advertising, The percentage is about 54 which is more than other categories.

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