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Share of total employment, Camba District, 1996-1999 Employment type 1996 1997 1998 1999 Growing crops 46% 48% 46% 38% Factory work 30% 41% 49% 59% Clothes making 24% 11% 5% 3%

Share of total employment, Camba District, 1996-1999 Employment type 1996 1997 1998 1999 Growing crops 46% 48% 46% 38% Factory work 30% 41% 49% 59% Clothes making 24% 11% 5% 3% XEjer
The above table compares the total employment share in different sections(Growing crops, Factory work, Clothes making) from 1996 to 1999 of Camba District. Overall, employment was consistently poor in clothes section and increasing over the years(from 1996-1999) in Factory work section. Thr highest and lowest sales in this period was of Factory work and Clothing. If we take a look at the Growning crops section, first increase from 46% to 48%(1996-1997) and then active decrease from 48% to 38%(1997-1999) was shown however, shares of employment seriously increased from directly 30% to 59% which is almost the double and clothes section also declined from 24 % to 3% which is 1/8 times. The highest sales for Growing crops was in year 1997 which is 48% and lowest is 38% in 1999 however, Factory employment sales touched 59% which is at the peak and 30%(year 1996) as their initial and the lowest. The overall lowest and highest was 3% and 59% of Clothing and Fatory in the same year 1999.
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declined from 24 % to 3% which is 1/8 times.

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