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the average Saturday sales of 2 bakeries in London in 2010

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The bar chart below depicts the sales for 8 different items of 2 bakeries in London(LL and BB) on every Saturday. It can be seen that doughnuts were by far the most common items for both LL and BB bakeries. Another striking feature is that BB bakeries sold generally more items than LL bakeries. As for BB, there were nearly 140 doughnuts sold. This figure was about 7 times more than toasted sandwiches and salads, which were 22 and 19 respectively. The second place was taken by cookies(120). Cakes followed behind, which was more than 100 on average. BB bakery sold a relatively equal number of rolls and crisps, approximately 80 per item. Fresh loaves were sold at an insignificant number, only just 40. In terms of LL bakery, the figure for doughnuts was slightly lower compared to BB, constituting 120. The lowest number of items that LL sold was toasted sandwiches, which was only 20. The cakes ranked second, numbering under 80. The third lowest was cookies, only 70 were sold, closely followed by rolls and crisps. In contrast, fresh loaves and salads' figures were higher than those of BB bakery, occupying 50 and more than 60 orderly.

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