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The provided flow chart depicts the information about how the cocoa beans are processed to attain in various products. There are three main stages in this process.

The provided flow chart depicts the information about how the cocoa beans are processed to attain in various products. There are three main stages in this process. k5KLR
Turning on the details, in the initial stage the cocoa beans are picked from the cocoa plant. After picked the whole beans outer shells are removed and is sent for drying. This is the last step of first stage. Than second stage is started by pressing. It consists numerous steps. Firstly the dried bean are pressed after this these are further pressed to bake cocoa cake. on the othe hand some dried beans are further refined to make industrial chocolate by added sugar in it. In the final and third stage, is grinded. The cocoa cake is ground to make cocoa powder and cocoa liquor. The powder is sent to the market to purchase by consumer and cocoa liquor is used to make cakes and drinks whereas the industrial chocolate is sent for final processing. It is sent to consumer before finished chocolate products Overall, there are three stages to continue this process. All the steps are needed to make different products from cocoa beans
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, in the initial
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the cocoa
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from the cocoa plant. After picked the whole
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outer shells
are removed
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sent
for drying. This is the last step of
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by pressing. It consists numerous steps.
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are pressed
after this these are
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pressed to bake cocoa cake.
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industrial chocolate by
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sugar in it. In the final and third
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cocoa powder and cocoa liquor. The powder is
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sent
to the market to
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purchase
by consumer and cocoa liquor is
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cakes and drinks whereas the industrial chocolate is
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for final processing. It is
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to consumer
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finished chocolate products
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IELTS academic The provided flow chart depicts the information about how the cocoa beans are processed to attain in various products. There are three main stages in this process.

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