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The provided diagram gives information about the step-by-step production of chocolate from raw cacao beans

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The provided diagram gives information about the step-by-step production of chocolate from raw cacao beans. Overall, it can clearly be seen that the process consists of 10 steps, from harvesting to melting the chocolate. Ripe red pods are harvested from cacao trees which were grown in not only South America, but also Africa and Indonesia. Then, white beans are seperated from its hard pods and fermented over few days before dried by sunshine until turning dark. On the next steps, trains and trucks are used to bring dried cacao beans to chocolate factories where the process is continue. After being transported, the beans are then roasted at 350 Celcius degree in an approriate period of time to make sure that there are no burns. Before being put into presure machine in the last step (which finally output chocolate liquid), roasted beans' outside part, the outer shell, are removed and than crushed finely in specific machine.
The provided diagram gives information about the step-by-step production of chocolate from raw cacao
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Overall
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be
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that the process consists of 10 steps, from harvesting to melting the chocolate.

Ripe red pods
are harvested
from cacao trees which
were grown
in not
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only
South America,
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also
Africa and Indonesia. Then, white
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beans
are
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seperated
from its
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hard
pods and fermented over few days
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before
dried by sunshine until turning dark. On the
next
steps, trains and trucks are
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used
to bring dried cacao
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beans
to chocolate factories where the process is
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continue
.

After
being transported
, the
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beans
are then roasted at 350
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Celcius
degree in an
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approriate
period of time to
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make
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Before
being put
into
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presure
machine in the last step (which
finally
output chocolate liquid), roasted beans' outside part, the outer shell,
are removed
and
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than
crushed
finely
in specific machine.
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