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The bar graph illustrates the amount of help given by six developed countries between 2008 and 2010

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The bar graph illustrates the amount of help given by six developed countries between 2008 and 2010. Units are measured in billions of dollars. Overall, the aids of the US, the UK, Japan, Netherland and Sweden fluctuated. However, the figure for Germany showed a continue increase over the time the period. Moreover, the highest amount of help from the US among all other countries in given time the period. In terms of the US, the amount of aid provided was 22 billion dollars in 2008, being higher than 2009 by 2 billion dollars, the figure rose and peaked at $25 billion in 2010. In addition, Japan and the UK showed similar up-down trend to give help to developing countries, with figures ranging from 10 to 12 billion dollars in three years. Turning to Germany contribution, there was a sharp increase in aid from 10$billion in 2008 to $14billion in 2009, then after this figure increased by $1 billion. The aid from Netherland and Sweden accounted under 10 billion dollars, both figure experienced similar change between 2008 and 2010.
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developed countries
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for Germany
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help
from the US among all other countries in
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time the period.

In terms of the US, the amount of
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aid
provided was 22
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billion
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dollars
in 2008, being higher than 2009 by 2
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billion
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, the
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rose and peaked at $25
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billion
in 2010.
In addition
, Japan and the UK
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similar up-down trend to give
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to
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developing countries
, with
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figures
ranging from 10 to 12
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billion
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dollars
in three years.

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$14billion
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increased by $1
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billion
. The
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experienced similar
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between 2008 and 2010.
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