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The provided bar graph illustrates types of qualifications which males and females in Australia in the year 1999 acquired after school and the percentage of each gender.

The provided bar graph illustrates types of qualifications which males and females in Australia in the year 1999 acquired after school and the percentage of each gender. KnlVM
The provided bar graph illustrates types of qualifications which males and females in Australia in the year 1999 acquired after school and the percentage of each gender. Overall, undergraduate diploma was the most obtained qualification in Australia in 1999. Additionally, the greatest discrepancy between men and women was recorded in skilled vocational diploma. As can be seen, undergraduate diploma was the highest obtained level of qualification, with approximately 105% of men and women. In contrast, both sexes registered no more than 50% who held bachelor’s degrees. The others, which were skilled vocational diploma, postgraduate diploma and masters degree, witnessed a hundred percent as the total ratio of both genders. While men were ahead of women in skilled vocational diploma, postgraduate diploma and master degree, the opposite was true with other qualifications. Skilled vocational degree experienced the most noticeable gap between males and females, which was 80%. Postgraduate diploma and master degree registered 70% and 60% of men respectively. Besides, the percentage of women who held an undergraduate diploma was 70%, doubling that of men. Moreover, both genders were nearly equal in the ratio of bachelor’s degree, with 50% of females and 45% of males.
The provided bar graph illustrates types of
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qualifications
which males and females in Australia in the year 1999 acquired after school and the percentage of each gender.

Overall
, undergraduate
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diploma
was the most obtained
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qualification
in Australia in 1999.
Additionally
, the greatest discrepancy between
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men
and
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women
was recorded
in
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skilled
vocational diploma.

As can be
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, undergraduate
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diploma
was the highest obtained level of
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qualification
, with approximately 105% of
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men
and
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women
.
In contrast
, both sexes registered no more than 50% who held bachelor’s
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degrees
. The others, which were
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skilled
vocational
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diploma
, postgraduate
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diploma
and
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masters
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degree
, witnessed a hundred percent as the total ratio of both genders.

While
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men
were ahead of
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women
in
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skilled
vocational
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diploma
, postgraduate
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diploma
and master
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degree
, the opposite was true with other
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qualifications
.
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Skilled
vocational
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degree
experienced the most noticeable gap between males and females, which was 80%. Postgraduate
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diploma
and master
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degree
registered 70% and 60% of
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men
respectively
.
Besides
, the percentage of
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women
who held an undergraduate
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diploma
was 70%, doubling that of
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men
.
Moreover
, both genders were
nearly
equal in the ratio of bachelor’s
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degree
, with 50% of females and 45% of males.
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