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The provided bar graph elucidates the comparison of Mongolian the statement’s debt in 2010 to 2018.

The provided bar graph elucidates the comparison of Mongolian the statement’s debt in 2010 to 2018. m86en
The provided bar graph elucidates the comparison of Mongolian the statement’s debt in 2010 to 2018. As general trendy, there are the highest amount of debt was in 2015, 2016, whereas it was lowest in 2011, 2014 and 2018. As far as the number of bill in 2011, 2014 and 2018 are concerned, it was 55 billion in 2018; nevertheless, there were 51. 7 billion in 2011, which was the lowest. Additionally, the debit of Mongolia in 2014 and 2018 were remarkably similar. The most striking difference is that the credit of it was lower by 3. 3 billion than 2018. Furthermore, it has been observed that it is lower than others. As regards with the Mongolian loan in 2015 and 2016, it was 79 billion, which was the highest; however, it was 77. 4 billion. Moreover, it is worth noting that the mortgage of the Mongolian economy soared up relatively by 1. 6 billion. What is more remarkable about it that the number of the debt in 2015 rocketed by 12. 7 billion than of 2014. Interestingly, it should be also noted that, by 2009, the increase of the lend in 2016 can be noticed in this data, and it has been fluctuating over the period.
The provided bar graph elucidates the comparison of Mongolian the statement’s debt in 2010 to 2018.

As general trendy, there are the highest
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amount
of debt was in 2015, 2016, whereas it was lowest in 2011, 2014 and 2018.

As far as the number of bill in 2011, 2014 and 2018
are concerned
, it was 55
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billion
in 2018;
nevertheless
, there were 51. 7
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billion
in 2011, which was the lowest.
Additionally
, the debit of Mongolia in 2014 and 2018 were
remarkably
similar. The most striking difference is that the credit of it was lower by 3. 3
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billion
than 2018.
Furthermore
, it has
been observed
that it is lower than others.

As regards with the Mongolian loan in 2015 and 2016, it was 79
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billion
, which was the highest;
however
, it was 77. 4
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
.
Moreover
, it is worth noting that the mortgage of the Mongolian economy soared up
relatively
by 1. 6
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
billion
.
What is more
remarkable about it that the number of the debt in 2015 rocketed by 12. 7
Use "(billion)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
billion
than of 2014.
Interestingly
, it should be
also
noted that, by 2009, the increase of
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the lend
in 2016 can
be noticed
in this data, and it has been fluctuating over the period.
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