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The provided bar chart presents the number of participants in Basketball, Swimming, Tennis, Football, and Hockey, as the results of a sports interview among one hundred adults, boys and girls in Manchester, England.

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The provided bar chart presents the number of participants in Basketball, Swimming, Tennis, Football, and Hockey, as the results of a sports interview among one hundred adults, boys and girls in Manchester, England. Overall, it is obvious that Swimming was the most favorable sport, while Basketball and Football were not enjoyed much by the interviewees. Meanwhile, the total number of boys who participated in all five sports was highest, the opposite was true for girls. It is clearly demonstrated in the bar chart that the number of Swimming participants was highest which accounted for more than 150 adults, boys, and girls. Nevertheless, only less than 100 interviewees answered that they played Basketball and Football. On the other hand, the majority of participants in all five sports were boys, while it was recorded for only 95 girls who played these sports - the least number compared to their counterparts. Moreover, it is seeable that most adults enjoyed playing Hockey, while most boys played Football, and most girls played Tennis.
The provided bar chart presents the
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of participants in Basketball, Swimming, Tennis,
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Football
, and Hockey, as the results of a
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sports
interview among one hundred adults,
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boys
and
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girls
in Manchester, England.

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, it is obvious that Swimming was the most favorable
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sport
, while Basketball and
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Football
were not enjoyed much by the interviewees. Meanwhile, the total
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number
of
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boys
who participated in all five
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sports
was highest, the opposite was true for girls.

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clearly
demonstrated in the bar chart that the
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number
of Swimming participants was highest which accounted for more than 150 adults,
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boys
, and
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girls
.
Nevertheless
,
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only
less than 100 interviewees answered that they played

Basketball and
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Football
.
On the other hand
, the majority of participants in all five
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sports
were
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boys
, while it
was recorded
for
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only
95
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girls
who played these
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sports
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-
the least
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number
compared to their counterparts.
Moreover
, it is
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seeable
that most adults enjoyed playing Hockey, while most
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boys
played
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Football
, and most
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girls
played Tennis.
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IELTS academic The provided bar chart presents the number of participants in Basketball, Swimming, Tennis, Football, and Hockey, as the results of a sports interview among one hundred adults, boys and girls in Manchester, England.

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