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the proportions of management roles occupied by women in a European country during 2006.

the proportions of management roles occupied by women in a European country during 2006. K0P11
The table shows information about the proportions of management roles occupied by women in a European country during 2006. Overall, it is clear that the hospitality had the highest portion of women in the senior position. However, Finance had lowest in 2006. Looking at the chart more closely, one can see that the rate of women’s managers had the highest in hospitality, with women representing almost one-third of the total. Other categories of this industry also comprised higher than other industries, almost 20 persent of female’s executives and 20. 6 persent of women’s CEOs respectively. In contrast, Manufacturing had the lowest than in all other industries, with women accounting for 9 persent of managers and less than 2 persent of other categories. In both finance and IT made up over 16 persent of women’s managers. However, the figures of female’s executives and CEOs in finance were lower than 5 persent. Meanwhile, the percentage of executives held by women was around 13 persent and that of CEOs was 6. 58 persent in IT industry.
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in a European country during 2006.

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that the hospitality had the highest portion of
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women
in the senior position.
However
, Finance had lowest in 2006.

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that the rate of
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managers had the highest in hospitality, with
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representing almost one-third of the total.
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Other
categories of this
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industry
also
comprised higher than
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other
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, almost 20
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of female’s executives and 20. 6
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CEOs
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industries
, with
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women
accounting for 9
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of managers and less than 2
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of
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categories. In both finance and IT made up over 16
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. Meanwhile, the percentage of executives held by
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was around 13
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and that of CEOs was 6. 58
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in IT
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IELTS academic the proportions of management roles occupied by women in a European country during 2006.

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6.0
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