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the proportion of the change of tourism in two countries from 1960 to 2010.

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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of the change of tourism in two countries from 1960 to 2010. The general overview here is that the majority of tourism in Australia came from The Europe in 1960, While after 50-year Most of tourism came from the Asia but in the Germany the highest amount of tourism came from the Europe throughout the period. As it can be seen from the charts, The amount European People was the most number of tourism in Australia in 1960, accounting for 53% of the total percentage. There was a significant decrease of 43% to 10% in 2010. Similarly, the number of tourism from the Britain and the USA dropped slightly by 5% to 20% and 7%, respectively over the given period, while the number of tourism from Asia rose dramatically by 53% from exactly 10% to 63% after passing 50 years. In contrast, the amount of the Europe tourism was the most number in Germany over passing 50 years, with the figure of 45% in 1960 and 40% in 2010. Moreover, the number of tourism from the USA increased minimally by 4% to 29% in 2010. Likewise, there was a steady rise of the number of the Asia tourism from 10% to 50% after five decade. However, the number of the Britain tourism declined moderately of 14% to 6% over the period observed.
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in two countries from 1960 to 2010. The general overview here is that the majority of
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in Australia came from The Europe in 1960, While after 50-year Most of
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came from the Asia
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in the Germany the highest amount of
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came from the Europe throughout the period.

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from the charts, The amount European
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in Australia in 1960, accounting for 53% of the total percentage. There was a significant decrease of 43% to 10% in 2010.
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from the Britain and the USA dropped
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from Asia rose
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was the most
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in Germany over passing 50 years, with the figure of 45% in 1960 and 40% in 2010.
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from the USA increased
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of the Asia
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from 10% to 50% after five
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of the Britain
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