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The bar chart delineates the use of residential water, including both homes and apartments, in Australia, in 2004

The bar chart delineates the use of residential water, including both homes and apartments, in Australia, in 2004 6LP7r
The charts show the total usage proportions for water in Australia and a breakdown of its residential purposes. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the vast majority of water is dedicated to houses, followed by apartments, industry, businesses and finally others. In terms of residential use, it is mainly for bathrooms and gardens, with lower numbers for washing clothes, toilets and kitchens. Looking first of all at the pie chart, houses represent 57% of total water usage, far surpassing apartments at 13%. Industry was in third place in terms of water use at 11% and the final three all had percentages of 10 or under with business being 10%, government 6%, and lastly other at (3%). The bar chart delineates the uses of residential water, including both homes and apartments. Nearly 30% of all water was used for bathrooms, the highest figure, while gardens were slightly lower at 26%. Washing clothes translates to 20% of usage, followed by toilets at 15%, and kitchen use totalling just 10%. In summary, it is clear that most water was used by people at home and the main reason for water use was for menial chores
The charts
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show
the total usage proportions for
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water
in Australia and a breakdown of its residential purposes. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that the vast majority of
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water
is dedicated
to
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houses
, followed by apartments, industry, businesses and
finally
others. In terms of residential
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use
, it is
mainly
for bathrooms and gardens, with lower numbers for washing clothes, toilets and kitchens.

Looking
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first of all
at the pie chart,
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houses
represent 57% of total
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water
usage, far surpassing apartments at 13%. Industry was in third place in terms of
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water
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use
at 11% and the final three all had percentages of 10 or under with business being 10%,
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government
6%, and
lastly
other at (3%).

The bar chart delineates the
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uses
of residential
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water
, including both homes and apartments.
Nearly
30% of all
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water
was
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used
for bathrooms, the highest figure, while gardens were
slightly
lower at 26%. Washing clothes translates to 20% of usage, followed by toilets at 15%, and kitchen
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use
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totalling
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just
10%.

In summary, it is
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clear
that most
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water
was
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used
by
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people
at home and the main reason for
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water
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use
was for menial chores

IELTS academic The bar chart delineates the use of residential water, including both homes and apartments, in Australia, in 2004

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