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The proportion of adult who owned digital devices in the usa from 2004 to 2015.

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the line graph illustrates the percentage of adult who owned digital gadgets in the united state between 2004 and 20015. from an overall perspective, the ratio of desktop or laptop started at the highest point of 71% in 2004. from 2004 to 2008, this figure remained unchanged and reached at 80% in the year 2008. This proportion of grown-up flactuated in the year 2008 to 2012. whereas, personal desktop or laptop ratio decreased slightly by 73% in the last year. Most importantly, android phones began at more than 30% in 2011 and this famount skyrocketed with 68% in the year 2015. Similarly, tablet also commenced at the lowest point of 3% in 2010. this percentage increased constantly till the year 2015 with 45%. on the contrary, less than 5% of e-book reader adults have in the america in 2009 and this figure rose by approximately 35% in 2013. while this e-book reader ratio was a minimal decline by 19% in the year 2015. overall, it is evident that smart phone and tablet shows the continous surge in the throughout the year, whereas e-book reader shows downward trend.
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from
2004 to 2008, this figure remained unchanged and reached at 80% in the
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2008. This proportion of grown-up
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flactuated
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2008 to 2012.
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whereas
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. Most
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skyrocketed with 68% in the
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2015.
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2015 with 45%.
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while
this e-book reader ratio was a minimal decline by 19% in the
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2015.
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overall
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