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People have different views about the importance of teachers and computers in education.

People have different views about the importance of teachers and computers in education. dpldK
People have different views about the importance of teachers and computers in education. Although some believe that computers can make a great contribution to the quality of education, I would contend that teachers have a more crucial role in educating students. On the one hand, there are those who claim that education possibly reaps many benefits from computers. On the other hand, I agree with those who believe that the role of teachers cannot be marginalized by computers. In conclusion, although computers cab be seen as a contributing factor to the improvement of education, I am of the opinion that teachers still hold a more vital position in the learning environment.
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