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The pie charts show profession chosen by females graduates of a Aberforth University in 1990 and 2015.

The pie charts show profession chosen by females graduates of a Aberforth University in 1990 and 2015. b3x8X
The two pie charts compares the percentage of Aberforth female degree holders in selecting the careers in particular years 1990 and 2015. Overall, it is observed that in 1990, the trend in choosing education sector was a dominant choice in comparison to the least adopted profession of management. However, the choices about careers's selection were equally distributed in all the disciplines in 2015. To begin with, the education was the most popular choice with 40% to pursue as a career followed by 30% in science related fields with the proportion of 25% in medical and 15% in Engineering departments. In contrast to this, Management was the least preferred option with only 10% of females graduates pursing it as their profession. However, in 2015, the choices were shifted more towards science related fields with 25% rise in medical and 15% in engineering sectors. There was also two fold increase in number of graduates picking up management careers. Meanwhile, the women's interest to adopt careers in humanities dropped significantly to 25% and 15% for education and arts group.
The two pie charts compares the percentage of
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female degree holders in selecting the
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careers
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years 1990 and 2015.

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, it
is observed
that in 1990, the trend in choosing education sector was a dominant
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choice
in comparison
to the least adopted profession of management.
However
, the
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choices
about
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careers's
selection were
equally
distributed in all the disciplines in 2015.

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begin
with, the education was the most popular
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choice
with 40% to pursue as a
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career
followed by 30% in science related fields with the proportion of 25% in medical and 15% in Engineering departments.
In contrast
to this, Management was the least preferred option with
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only
10% of females graduates pursing it as their profession.

However
, in 2015, the
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choices
were shifted
more towards science related fields with 25% rise in medical and 15% in engineering sectors. There was
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two fold
increase in number of graduates picking up management
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careers
. Meanwhile, the women's interest to adopt
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careers
in humanities dropped
significantly
to 25% and 15% for education and arts group.
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