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The production process of sugar

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The figure represented below displays the process of the sugar production which is started from the sugar cane. Overall, there are some steps using a number of appliances to process the sugar cane. To begin, the sugar cane must be grown for 12-18 months before it has ready to be harvested, whether by using the harvester machine or by hand manually. Furthermore, the harvested sugar cane have to be processed in a crusher to make it as the ‘juice’. This matter, in the subsequent stage, is purified by using a device called limestone filter. Moreover, the purified juice distributed into the evaporator in order to transform it as the syrup. When the syrup eventually has been formed, this substance is sent to the centrifuge to let the sugar crystals being separated from the syrup. The crystals, finally, are dried and cooled in the big tube. The sugar crystals then are ready to be marketed.
The figure represented below displays the process of the
sugar
production which is
started
from the
sugar
cane.
Overall
, there are
some
steps using a number of appliances to process the
sugar
cane.

To
begin
, the
sugar
cane
must
be grown
for 12-18 months
before
it has ready to
be harvested
, whether by using the harvester machine or by hand
manually
.
Furthermore
, the harvested
sugar
cane
have to
be processed
in a crusher to
make
it as the ‘juice’. This matter, in the subsequent stage,
is purified
by using a device called limestone filter.

Moreover
, the purified juice distributed into the evaporator in order to transform it as the syrup. When the syrup
eventually
has
been formed
, this substance is
sent
to the centrifuge to
let
the
sugar
crystals
being separated
from the syrup. The crystals,
finally
,
are dried
and cooled in the
big
tube. The
sugar
crystals then are ready to
be marketed
.
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IELTS academic The production process of sugar

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154 words
6.5
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