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The process soda Canning of how to Canning of Apple

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The given process shows the, steps of the fresh apples Canning. According to diagram that, first step is to picking fresh apples with the use of hand. Then, to transport it in the truck from farm to factories. The Next stap is, to wash the apple and contribute it with qualities wise. After that, to store in the cold room in suitable temperature. Next, to waiting and grading it. Then, to peeling it and to remove the core of apples and cut it into small pieces. To the next steps, with the use of bottle canning process is done. Then the sealing cans and to cook it with steam and sterilise it. The Nextep is, labelling. To stick the label on bottle and move them into storage. Finally, to dispatch it and it ready to sales in store and supermarket. Overall, it is a multisteps process which start with the harvesting of apples and end with despatching it for sale.
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the,
steps of the fresh
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apples
Canning.

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first
step is
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to picking
fresh
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apples
with the
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use
of hand. Then, to transport it in the truck from farm to factories. The
Next
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stap
is, to wash the
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apple
and contribute it with qualities wise. After that, to store in the
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cold
room in suitable temperature.
Next
, to waiting and grading it. Then, to peeling it and to remove the core of
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apples
and
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cut
it into
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small
pieces.

To the
next
steps, with the
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use
of bottle canning process
is done
. Then the sealing cans and to cook it with steam and
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sterilise
it. The
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Nextep
is, labelling. To stick the label on bottle and
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move
them into storage.
Finally
, to dispatch it and it
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ready
to sales in store and supermarket.

Overall
, it is a
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multisteps
process which
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start
with the harvesting of
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apples
and
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end
with
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despatching
it for sale.
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IELTS academic The process soda Canning of how to Canning of Apple

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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