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The line graph give information consume of fast food the youngsters of Australia from 1950 to2000

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The line graph illustration consumption of junk food by the youngsters of Australia between 1950 and 2000. Overall, Friend was shown in the Hamburger and piza whereas, fish and chips represented downward trend. In 1975, fish and chips were two items of fast food which consumed 100times by Australian teenagers. After five years they showed slight change. But in 1985 demand of fish and chips rose slowly. young generation of Australia ate them 85 times. However, after this significant change was noticed in the case of consumption of fish and chips. finally, in 2000, teenagers purchased them 40 times. Furthermore, Hamburger was the other kind of junk food. in the initial year, dramatically change was observed in consumption of it. demand of this increased in the 1985. Australia purchased it 85 times. Surprisingly, it taught above than 100 times in 2000as it reached at the peak point. Moreover, consumption of pizza was only 5 Percent in 1975. from 1980_1990, demand for it dramatically increased. But in 1995 and after five years consumption of it remained constant.
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whereas, fish and chips represented downward trend.

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in 1985 demand of fish and chips rose
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, after this significant
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finally
, in 2000,
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purchased
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in
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in 2000as it reached at the peak point.
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