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The line graph illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 or over in Japan, Sweden and the USA over a 100-year period starting from 1940.

The line graph illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 or over in Japan, Sweden and the USA over a 100-year period starting from 1940. RVwnP
The line graph illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 or over in Japan, Sweden and the USA over a 100-year period starting from 1940. Overall, there is an increase in the number of elderly people in all three countries from 1940 to 2040. Japan is predicted to experience the sharpest increases in the share of its elderly population. In 1940, 9% of Americans were senior citizens compared to 7% of Swedish people and 5% of Japanese people. From 1940 to 1980, the USA and Sweden’s aging population rose by about 6%, reaching 15% and 14% respectively in 1980. However, the figure for Japan remained under 5% throughout the same period. In the future, a sudden soar in the proportion of people aged 65 or over is anticipated for Japan. In 2040, the number of the aged in Japan will account for more than one-quarter of its total population, while the figures for the America and Sweden will be slightly lower, at around 25% and 23% respectively.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of
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aged 65 or over in
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Japan
, Sweden and the USA over a 100-year period starting from 1940.

Overall
, there is an increase in the number of elderly
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people
in all three countries from 1940 to 2040.
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Japan
is predicted
to experience the sharpest increases in the share of its elderly population.

In 1940, 9% of Americans were senior citizens compared to 7% of Swedish
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people
and 5% of Japanese
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people
. From 1940 to 1980, the USA and Sweden’s aging population rose by about 6%, reaching 15% and 14%
respectively
in 1980.
However
, the figure for
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Japan
remained under 5% throughout the same period.

In the future, a sudden soar in the proportion of
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people
aged 65 or over
is anticipated
for
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Japan
. In 2040, the number of the aged in
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Japan
will account for more than one-quarter of its total population, while the figures for the America and Sweden will be
slightly
lower, at around 25% and 23%
respectively
.
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