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The presented bar chart demonstrated the percentage of IT and service industry in the UK GDP during eight different years, commencing from 1992.

The presented bar chart demonstrated the percentage of IT and service industry in the UK GDP during eight different years, commencing from 1992. PRdXB
The presented bar chart demonstrated the percentage of IT and service industry in the UK GDP during eight different years, commencing from 1992. Overall, the proportion of the service industry increased each year. The It industry contributed a higher proportion in the UK GDP than the service industry. It is apparently seen that in 1996, the proportion of theIT industry accounted for 12 percent of the UK GDP, doubled to that of 1992. During 1994 and 1996, the rate of the IT industry remained unchanged at around 8 percent. Before being the highest at around 15 percent, the proportion of theIT industry raised to 12 percent in1998. Before being constant at around 6 percent during 1994 and 1996, the proportion of the service industry was the lowest at 4 percent in 1992. There was a marginal increase in the proportion of the service industry to just above 8 percent in 2000.
The presented bar chart demonstrated the percentage of IT and
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in the UK GDP during eight
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different
years, commencing from 1992.

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of the
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industry
increased each year.
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The It
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industry
contributed a higher
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proportion
in the UK GDP than the
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service
industry.

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that in 1996, the
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theIT
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industry
accounted for 12
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of the UK GDP, doubled to that of 1992. During 1994 and 1996, the rate of the IT
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industry
remained unchanged at around 8
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.
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being the highest at around 15
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, the
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theIT
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industry
raised to 12
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in1998.

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being constant at around 6
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during 1994 and 1996, the
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of the
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service
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was the lowest at 4
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percent
in 1992. There was a marginal increase in the
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of the
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service
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to
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above 8
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in 2000.
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IELTS academic The presented bar chart demonstrated the percentage of IT and service industry in the UK GDP during eight different years, commencing from 1992.

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