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the popularity of fast food in five Australian cities

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The table illustrates the popularity of five major types of fast food in Melbourne between 2005 and 2021. Furthermore, it makes a prediction as well about the near future. It is clear from the given information, that the figures of every type of fast food increased during the last 16 years, and more growth is expected in the next 4 years except for fried rice. The salads had the greatest rise of 10 units between 2005 and our present days, however the figures of noodles climbed by just 2. It is furthermore (már használtad, cseréld ki vmi szinonímára) predicted (ez is szóismétlés pl. project)) that eating salads will have an even steeper growth to 41 units. On the other hand, hamburgers will be remain the most popular type of fast food in Melbourne with 51 units, just as it was with 40 in 2005 and it is nowadays. It is worth mentioning that its popularity fell slightly from 2005 and 2021, while every other types fast food had a smaller or greater increase.
The table illustrates the popularity of five major
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in Melbourne between 2005 and 2021.
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that eating salads will have an even steeper growth to 41 units.

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the most popular
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in Melbourne with 51 units,
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as it was with 40 in 2005 and it is nowadays. It is worth mentioning that its popularity fell
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had a smaller or greater increase.
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IELTS academic the popularity of fast food in five Australian cities

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3 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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