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The pie chart shows the reasons for choosing cycling and driving for work

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The two pie charts show causes behinde the cycling and driving to work. The data is calibrated in percentage. Overall, health and fitness and less pollution are the major reasons for choosing cycling whereas comfort is preferred by the masses who choose driving. It can be clearly seen that 15% of masses are choosing cycling to work because it has no parking issue. With the difference of 1%, no cost and faster than driving are causes are at third and fourth position with 13 and 14 % respectively. Besides, less pollution and health and fitness are the causes which are at first place with 30%. Probing further, for majority of individuals comfort is the prime cause to drive a car while safer than cycling is the least common, with only 11%. Moreover, for almost a fifth of the masses distance to work is a reason to drive a car. And similar proportion of people are using cars to drive to work due to its speed and it can carry things to work is
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. The data
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, health and fitness and less pollution are the major reasons for choosing
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that 15% of masses are choosing
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cycling
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work
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it has no parking issue. With the difference of 1%, no cost and faster than driving are
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are at third and fourth position with 13 and 14 %
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.
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, less pollution and health and fitness are the
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which are at
first
place with 30%. Probing
further
, for
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majority of
individuals comfort is the prime
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to drive a car while safer than
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cycling
is the least common, with
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11%.
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, for almost a fifth of the masses distance to
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work
is a reason to drive a car. And similar proportion of
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people
are using cars to drive to
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due to its speed and it can carry things to
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the reasons for choosing cycling and driving for work

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5.0
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