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major changes of a small town

major changes of a small town Wg69D

The maps illustrate the major changes of a small town near Melbourne between 1900 and 1950. It is clear from the given pictures that Tarnagul and its area has have undergone a lot of changes. Just Only the old road, the northern orange field and the river didn’t changed during this over the next 50 years. First of all, a railroad was built at the eastern side of the town. and A railway station was constructed as well, on the southern side of the road. On the northern side 1-1 packing sheds were created on both sides of the railroad. The extent territory of the settlement grew by almost 50%. The river didn’t change at all, just like the old road. In addition, the southern mandarin fields were replaced by oranges but the area of this field had experienced a slight increase. On the other side of the river the dairy was destroyed, and on its territory were it was replaced by a lemon and grapefruit grown field. This field This area extended by more than one-third.

The maps illustrate the major This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 of a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 town near Melbourne between 1900 and 1950. It is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 from the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 pictures that Possible spelling mistake found.Barnaul
Tarnagul
 and its area has have undergone This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
Just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
Only
 the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 road, the northern orange You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmeadowterritoryterrainrangegreengrassland
field
 and the river didn’t The verb 'didn't' requires base form of this verb: "change"change
changed
 during this over the next
 50 years.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, a railroad was built
 at the eastern side of the town. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterAnd
and
 A railway station was constructed
as well
, on the southern side of the road. On the northern side 1-1 packing sheds were created
 on both You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsectorbottomtopsurfacehandpart
sides
 of the railroad.

The extent territory of the settlement grew by almost 50%. The river didn’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 at all, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 like the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 road.

In addition
, the southern mandarin You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmeadowterritoryterrainrangegreengrassland
fields
were replaced
 by oranges This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the area of this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmeadowterritoryterrainrangegreengrassland
field
 had experienced a slight increase. On the other side of the river the dairy was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demolishedruined
destroyed
, and on its territory Did you mean "where" or "we"?wherewe
were
 it was replaced
 by a lemon and grapefruit grown You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmeadowterritoryterrainrangegreengrassland
field
. This You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmeadowterritoryterrainrangegreengrassland
field
 This area extended by more than one-third. 