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the plans below show a public park built in 1920

the plans below show a public park built in 1920 APNRN
The two maps illustrates the differences in the structure of the park, in the year 1920 and in the current scenario. Overall, the park has undergone many changes and most significantly it has a new underground car parking facility. The fountain in the centre of the park is now replaced with a rose garden with necessary seating area around it. And, the stage for musicians is now replaced with a modern amphitheatre, which can be used for concerts and can accommodate good amount of audience. On the side of the park, rose garden is now changed to a café, while the pond for water plants has been demolished to make space for a children’s play area. Last but not least, the glasshouse near the Eldon street entrance has been replaced with a new water feature. Despite undergoing many changes the park still retains some of it’s old structure. The entrances to the park remains the same and the rose garden near the stage for musicians retains it’s shape. However, all seats in the park are removed to make needed space for some architectures.
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, in the year 1920 and in the
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scenario.

Overall
, the
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has undergone
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changes
and most
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it has a new underground car parking facility. The fountain in the
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centre
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is
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now
replaced with a rose garden with necessary seating area around it. And, the stage for musicians is
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now
replaced with a modern
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amphitheatre
, which can be
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used
for concerts and can accommodate
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good
amount of audience. On the side of the
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, rose garden is
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now
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changed
to a café, while the pond for water plants has
been demolished
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make
space for a children’s play area. Last
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not least, the glasshouse near the Eldon street entrance has
been replaced
with a new water feature.

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still
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of it’s
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structure. The entrances to the
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remains the same and the rose garden near the stage for musicians retains
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are removed
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needed space for
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