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The bar chart compares the number of eating at fast food restaurants

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The bar chart compares the number of eating at fast food restaurants in the USA by the six different cases between 2003 and 2013. Overall, it is clear that (once a week) and (once or twice a month) was by far the highest number over the period shown. Also, the number of people eating fast food every day is a negligible amount. In 2003, people having fast food once a week was just over 30% and after 3 years, it saw only a small rise. Moreover the figures fell by approximately 5% in 2013. The proportion of (once or twice a month) had a little drop in 2003. Just 3 years later, however, there was a 5% decrease, whereas the amount of having a meal at fast food restaurants saw an increase around 8%. Regard to the lowest percentage, the number of (every day) and (never) were under 5% over the period shown. Moreover, both of them had a little decrease after 2003.
The bar chart compares the
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restaurants in the USA by the six
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cases between 2003 and 2013.

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, it is
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that
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a week) and
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(once
or twice a month) was by far the highest
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over the period shown.
Also
, the
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of
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eating
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every day is a negligible amount.

In 2003,
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a week was
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over 30% and after 3 years, it
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Moreover
the figures fell by approximately 5% in 2013. The proportion of
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(once
or twice a month) had a
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drop in 2003.
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3 years later,
however
, there was a 5% decrease, whereas the amount of having a meal at
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restaurants
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an increase around 8%.

Regard to the lowest percentage, the
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of (every day) and (never) were under 5% over the period shown.
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, both of them had a
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little
decrease after 2003.
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IELTS academic The bar chart compares the number of eating at fast food restaurants

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