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The chart shows the amount of time children spend with their parents according to various age groups.

The chart shows the amount of time children spend with their parents according to various age groups. ELY1b
the bar charts illustrate how much time is spent by children with their parents at 5 different age groups. overall, it can be seen that the various age groups which are close with their father are the least. On the contrary, mothers, who usually take care of their children, are the most. especially, at the weekends, both dad and mom spend a lot of time with their kids. In terms of weekdays, only about 1 to 2 hours is used by the children to do things with their father only or with both of their parents. Unlike this small-time distribution, the biggest time amount of 5 hours is recorded when children from all age groups interact with their moms. Although the weekend time children spend with alone their moms is 3 hours less than during weekdays, it remains one of the significant categories of the children’s time. In contrast, fathers have very little time alone with their kids on Saturdays and Sundays. Particularly, only 1. 7 hours at max for kids from 4 to 5 and almost none at all for children from 8 to 9 and babies under 1. Regarding doing things as a whole family, at weekends children from 2 to 9 have more time to be with both of their moms and dads. In particular, on Saturdays and Sundays, kids from 2 to 9 years old have around 6 hours while babies under 1-year-old are approximately 5 hours
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with their parents at 5
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age groups.

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overall
, it can be
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that the various age groups which are close with their father are the least.
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, mothers, who
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take care of their
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, are the most.
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especially
, at the weekends, both dad and mom spend
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a lot of
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time
with their kids.

In terms of weekdays,
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about 1 to 2
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is
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by the
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children
to do things with their father
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or with both of their parents. Unlike this
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-time distribution, the biggest
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amount of 5
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is recorded
when
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children
from all age groups interact with their moms.

Although the weekend
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spend with alone their moms is 3
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less than during weekdays, it remains one of the significant categories of the
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.
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, fathers have
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alone with their kids on Saturdays and Sundays.
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1. 7
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at max for kids from 4 to 5 and almost none at all for
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from 8 to 9 and babies under 1. Regarding doing things as a whole family, at weekends
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from 2 to 9 have more
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to be with both of their moms and dads.
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have around 6
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while babies under 1-year-
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are approximately 5
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