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the plan below shows the public park first made in 1920 and the same park today.

the plan below shows the public park first made in 1920 and the same park today. 2Rgaw

The pictorial representations depict the map of a public garden Grange park firstly made in 1920 and of today. There are two main way in namely from Annold avenue and Eldon street. To commence with, in 1920 there were three rose garden where as in recent garden there are only two out of which ones position is changed. Moreover, there is no glass house, pond for water plants and fountain is their instead three new things have been introduced that is cafeteria, juvenile play are and lastly water feature. Adding to it earlier there was stage for musicians and four seating area around it on a contrary in todays garden there is an Amphitheatre for concerts whereas, there is one rose garden in the center surrounded by seats. It is crystal clear that in 1920 there was plethora of empty space but in recent a vital are is covered by central lawn. However the park have new entrance area for pupil who have parked the car underground.

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garden
 Grange park firstly
 made in 1920 and of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
. There are two main way in namely
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Annold
 avenue and Eldon street.

To commence with, in 1920 there were three rose You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbedfieldnurseryterracepatiogreenhouse
garden
Did you mean "whereas"?whereas
where as
 in recent You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbedfieldnurseryterracepatiogreenhouse
garden
 there are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 two Possible agreement error. Did you mean "outs"?outs
out
 of which ones position is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
. Moreover
, there is no glass This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
, pond for water plants and fountain is their instead
 three new things have been introduced
that is
 cafeteria, juvenile play are and lastly
 water feature. Adding to it earlier there was stage for musicians and four seating area around it on a contrary in Possible spelling mistake found.today'stodayto days
todays
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbedfieldnurseryterracepatiogreenhouse
garden
 there is an Possible spelling mistake. 'Amphitheatre' is British English.Amphitheater
Amphitheatre
 for concerts whereas, there is one rose You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbedfieldnurseryterracepatiogreenhouse
garden
 in the center surrounded by seats.

It is crystal This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that in 1920 there was plethora of empty space This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 in recent a vital are is covered
 by central lawn. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 the park have new entrance area for pupil who have parked the car underground. 