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The pile charts reveal the exports of various Australian products in 2005 and 2010

The pile charts reveal the exports of various Australian products in 2005 and 2010 8xY2l
In general, while coal, iron, wheat and meat account for the majority of this business among which fuel one always leads the market, the remaining (vehicles, computers, fish and wool) only contribute a small amount in both investigated years. As for 2005, coal is exported most with one third, which doubles wheat and nearly triple meat. Iron is also a major export with over one fourth, whereas wool and computers constitute a small rate, 6 (%) and 4 respectively. Finally, just a tiny 2 percent of export belongs to fish and vehicles for each. Regarding 2010, coal still dominates Australian export, over 10 higher than the figure of a half decade ago but iron and wheat exports decrease by 6 and 7 respectively, however still playing an important role. The total exports of fish, vehicles, computers and wool are constant, 14%, with a slight variation from 2 to 3 for each type compared to data of 2005. There is a marginal increase of 2 in meat, reflecting a slightly higher demand of this commodity after five years
In general
, while coal, iron, wheat and meat account for the majority of this business among which fuel one always leads the market, the remaining (vehicles, computers, fish and wool)
only
contribute a
small
amount in both investigated years.

As for 2005, coal
is exported
most with one third, which doubles wheat and
nearly
triple meat. Iron is
also
a major
export
with over one fourth, whereas wool and computers constitute a
small
rate, 6 (%) and 4
respectively
.
Finally
,
just
a tiny 2 percent of
export
belongs to fish and vehicles for each.

Regarding 2010, coal
still
dominates Australian
export
, over 10 higher than the figure of a half decade ago
but
iron and wheat
exports
decrease by 6 and 7
respectively
,
however
still
playing an
important
role. The total
exports
of fish, vehicles, computers and wool are constant, 14%, with a slight variation from 2 to 3 for each type compared to data of 2005. There is a marginal increase of 2 in meat, reflecting a
slightly
higher demand of this commodity after five
years
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