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The provided diagram illustrates how the frozen fish pieces are produced. Overall, it is apparent that there are a number of procedures of manufacturing frozen fish pies. According to the first diagram, in the microwavable container peas, sauce, fish as well as potato are avaliable. As can be seen from the second picture that the first stage of the process is about the deliveries potatoes up-to-one month which then are cleaned before cutting this potatoes into little slice, they are peeled. Once the potatoes are sliced, they are boiled and chilled then. The following stage of the process is storing. the preparation of the fish pie is more labour intensive than the preparation of the potatoes. Within 12 hours the salmon fish is added with lemon juice along with salt which then put into steam oven. Afterward, the skins and the bones of the fish are removed, then inspect. Prepared peas together with prepared sauce are wrapped, which go to freeze next, a way to store or dispatch fish.
The provided diagram illustrates how the frozen fish pieces
are produced
.

Overall
, it is apparent that there are a number of procedures of manufacturing frozen fish pies.

According to the
first
diagram, in the microwavable container peas, sauce, fish
as well
as
potato
are
avaliable
.

As can be
seen
from the second picture that the
first
stage of the process is about the deliveries
potatoes
up-to-one month which then
are cleaned
before
cutting
this
potatoes
into
little
slice, they
are peeled
. Once the
potatoes
are sliced
, they
are boiled
and chilled then. The following stage of the process is storing.
the
preparation of the fish pie is more
labour intensive
than the preparation of the
potatoes
. Within 12 hours the salmon fish is
added
with lemon juice along with salt which then put into steam oven. Afterward, the skins and the bones of the fish
are removed
, then inspect. Prepared peas together with prepared sauce
are wrapped
, which go to freeze
next
, a way to store or dispatch fish.
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IELTS academic The given diagram shows about the manufacture of frozen fish pies

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