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The pie graphs show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie graphs show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. QOJK
The given combination of pie chart compares the information about the percentage of different activities in which girls and boys participated. Overall, it is lucid that boys mostly liked to participate in computer games activity but girls mostly prefer dancing as their cultural and leisure activities. The interest of boys in computer games is greater than others and the respective figure is 34% whereas only fewer, like 10%, girls are interested in computer games. Most of the girls like dancing and reading and that is 27%, 21% respectively. But in the case of boys reading is on lowest position of boys cultural and leisure activities. Only 2% boys are interested in reading. Moving further, interestingly the figure of listening to music by boys and girls is same and that is only 10%. 11% boys are liked skateboarding while 11% girls like to play gymnastics. It is followed by the count of netball and soccer and that is 15% and 17% respectively.
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prefer dancing as their cultural and leisure
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reading is on lowest position of
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cultural and leisure
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like to play gymnastics. It
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by the count of netball and soccer and
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IELTS academic The pie graphs show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

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