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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. mJa1
The line graph illustrates the general temperatures over a year in three major cities (London, New York, and Sydney) while the table indicates the total hours of sunshine annually. Overall, it is noticeable that the hottest month of the year is July in London and New York in comparison with Sydney which is the coolest month in the year. Apart from the temperatures, New York has the highest hour of sunny days at 2535 as well as Sydney at 2473 compared to London has only half of the number at 1180. In terms of climate, New York experiences up to 30 degrees in July whereas London is nearly 25. By contrast, the coldest month in New York is January which is below 5 degrees and marginally 10 degrees in London. On the other hand, the highest figure of the year is January in Sydney which is above 25 degrees and the lowest point is July which is just slightly above 15 degrees.
The line graph illustrates the general temperatures over a
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year
in three major cities (London,
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New
York, and Sydney) while the table indicates the total hours of sunshine
annually
.

Overall
, it is noticeable that the hottest month of the
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year
is July in London and
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New
York
in comparison
with Sydney which is the coolest month in the
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year
. Apart from the temperatures,
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New
York has the highest hour of sunny days at 2535
as well
as Sydney at 2473 compared to London has
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only
half of the number at 1180.

In terms of climate,
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New
York experiences up to 30
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degrees
in July whereas London is
nearly
25. By contrast, the coldest month in
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New
York is January which is below 5
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degrees
and
marginally
10
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degrees
in London.
On the other hand
, the highest figure of the
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year
is January in Sydney which is above 25
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degrees
and the lowest point is July which is
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just
slightly
above 15
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degrees
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IELTS academic The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

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