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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. Vdm3
The diagram shows the time spent by childrens in various leisure and cultural activities. The boys tend to spend most of their free time in outdoor games. Whereas, girls spend most of their time in indoor activities. Less than 2% of boys utilize their free time in reading. However, more fraction of boys play computer games followed by basketball with 32%, 26% of boys playing them respectively. soocer and skateboarding are played by significant number of boys with 17% and 11% respectively. Apart from reading, boys have less interest in music with just 10% of them listening to it. On the contrary, most girls nearly 21% of them spend their free time reading. Most number of girls spend their time in dancing in particular 27% of them which is followed by reading. Similar to boys, only 10% of girls listen to music. Unlike boys only 16% of girls play computer games. Girls also play netball and gymnastics with 15% and 11% of them playing respectively.
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computer games followed by basketball with 32%, 26% of
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IELTS academic The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

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4 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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