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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

The chart illustrates the survey results of cultural and leisure activities between girls and boys. Accounting for the most sought out activity participated by males are computer games whereas lowest are listening to music and reading respectively. On another detail, dancing is the frequent leisure done by females and its least preferred engagement is same with boys which is listening to music. Playing computer games is popular among boys with the largest percentage of 34% of the population, followed by basketball which comprises more than one-third of male children, Soccer comes third in ranked accounting half of the boys playing computer games. Skateboarding and listening to music are less preferable activities chosen by 11% and 10% of boys respectively. The least popular is reading which only accounts 2%. Taking a closer look at the second chart, we can see that girls' most preferred activity is dancing, being 27% of the total. In contrast to the boys' preferences, reading is chosen by more than a fifth of all girls. Although percentage of female children who play computer games is roughly twice less than that of boys. (16%), this activity is third most popular on the girls' chart. With a slight difference between computer games and netball, the latter is practiced at 15% rate. Similarly to skateboarding popularity among boys, 11% of girls go in for gymnastics. Listening to music comes as the least popular leisure, with a proportion of 10%, equal to those on the first chart.
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illustrates the survey results of cultural and leisure
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activities
between girls and boys.

Accounting for the most sought out
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activity
participated by males are computer
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games
whereas lowest are listening to music and reading
respectively
. On another detail, dancing is the frequent leisure done by females and its least preferred engagement is same with
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boys
which is listening to music.

Playing computer
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games
is
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popular
among
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boys
with the largest percentage of 34% of the population, followed by basketball which comprises more than one-third of male children, Soccer
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comes
third in ranked accounting half of the
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boys
playing computer
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games
. Skateboarding and listening to music are less preferable
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activities
chosen by 11% and 10% of
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boys
respectively
. The least
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popular
is reading which
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only
accounts 2%.

Taking a closer look at the second
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, we can
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that girls' most preferred
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activity
is dancing, being 27% of the total.
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to the boys' preferences, reading
is chosen
by more than a fifth of all girls.
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percentage of female children who play computer
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is roughly twice less than that of
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. (16%), this
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is third most
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popular
on the girls'
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chart
. With a slight difference between computer
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games
and netball, the latter
is practiced
at 15% rate.
Similarly
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boys
, 11% of girls go in for gymnastics. Listening to music
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comes
as the least
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leisure, with a proportion of 10%, equal to those on the
first
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chart
.

IELTS academic The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

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