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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household.the second chart shows the Greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts iillustrate use of electricity in a proportion Australian house and the emissions of greenhouse gas which is the result of of the use of energy. It is clear that, in an average Australian family most uses energy in heating, but for its the greenhouse gas emissions only 15%. Australian household uses energy in least in the sector of cooling, it is to 2%. The most is in heating, which is 42%. The second most is in water heating, it is 30% and for water heating, most of the greenhouse gas emissions, which is 32%. Energy used in other appliance is 15% and the second most emissions of greenhouse gas is in this sector, it is is 28%. Electricity used in the least in the sector of cooling and in this sector Greenhouse gas emissions is only 3%. In lighting, the use of energy 4% and for this cause greenhouse gas emission is 8%, its double.
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IELTS academic The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. the second chart shows the Greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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