Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The chart provides information about a problem in rural and urban areas of Australia which happened in the year 2012 on the rate of unemployment.

The chart provides information about a problem in rural and urban areas of Australia which happened in the year 2012 on the rate of unemployment. All in all, the rate of unemployment in rural areas contributed more, whereas in urban areas the job opportunities were slightly more when compared to the former. In accordance with the first quarters of the year, initially it was 6. 5% and has a downward trend of 4% on the rate of unemployment, following this fashion, the chart represents a rise in jobless upto the third quarters of the year and again it rose sharply then fell slightly within that period. Along with some fluctuations, the graph went up a little and experienced a drop with 5% in the fourth quarters of the year. On the other hand, it is a well known truth that urban areas always contribute to a rise in job vacancies and thus remained lower in the unemployment rate when compared to the rural areas. Firstly starting with the rate of 2% in unemployment which then increased sharply upto 4% in the second quarters of the year. It then had fluctuations and despite the criteria that urban areas provide some job opportunities the unemployment rates rose markedly around 5% nearly meeting the situation as that was in urban areas.
The chart provides information about a problem in rural and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
urban
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
of Australia which happened in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
2012 on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
of unemployment.

All in all, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unemployment
in rural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
contributed more, whereas in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
urban
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
the job opportunities were
slightly
more when compared to the former.

In accordance with the
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quarters
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
,
initially
it was 6. 5% and has a downward trend of 4% on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unemployment
, following this fashion, the chart represents a rise in jobless
Possible spelling mistake found.
upto
the third
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quarters
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
and again it rose
sharply
then fell
slightly
within that period. Along with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
fluctuations, the graph went up a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
and experienced a drop with 5% in the fourth
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quarters
of the year.

On the other hand
, it is a well known truth that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
urban
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
always contribute to a rise in job vacancies and
thus
remained lower in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unemployment
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
when compared to the rural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
.
Firstly
starting with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
of 2% in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unemployment
which then increased
sharply
Possible spelling mistake found.
upto
4% in the second
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quarters
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
. It then had fluctuations and despite the criteria that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
urban
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
job opportunities the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unemployment
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rates
rose
markedly
around 5%
nearly
meeting the situation as that was in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
urban
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad
Show Comments
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS academic The chart provides information about a problem in rural and urban areas of Australia which happened in the year 2012 on the rate of unemployment.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts