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The pie graph chart shows and compares the seven favorable pastimes of girls at the University of Southern Utopia

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The pie graph chart shows and compares the seven favorable pastimes of girls at the University of Southern Utopia Overall, the female students are interested in different leisure activities. As can be seen from the graph, spending time with friends is the most popular pastime with a quarter of students involved in this activity. This is followed by shopping, with 20 percent participation. Doing sport, with 15% in the total, is the third most favored leisure activity. Meanwhile, 12. 5 percent of girls reported that they enjoyed going to the cinema, shared the same proportion with those who go to the nightclub. The least popular leisure is listening to music and chatting on the Internet, attract only 7. 5 percent of female students at the University of Southern Utopia
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by shopping, with 20 percent participation. Doing sport, with 15% in the total, is the third most favored leisure activity. Meanwhile, 12. 5 percent of girls reported that they enjoyed going to the cinema, shared the same proportion with those who go to the nightclub. The least popular leisure is listening to music and chatting on the Internet, attract
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